200 Word Flash Fiction ( The Rent)

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Today, I decided to share with you a flash fiction piece which won a contest. I was given a specific list of words to use. They are in bold print and told to write a story in under 200 words.  Let me know ways you think you’d improve on this story. I hope you enjoy it.    Shirley

The RentImage,

The forecast for the day is cold with a winter storm warning. I don’t want to get out of my nice warm bed, but I know I have to. There are many errands to run, and I have to do them before the storm hits.
 
Why Mrs. Flannigan has me pay my rent in person, I’ll never understand. It would be easier if I put it in the mail with my monthly bills. There isn’t any use crying and whining about it. That’s the way it is.
 
I back my car from the drive for the ten-mile trip to Mrs. Flannigan’s. Myphone is in my purse for an emergency. The sleet and freezing rain are  already falling. The radio announcer tells everyone to stay off the roads. I’m not the smartest person, because I’m driving. I can’t drive fast because of poor visibility.  My hands are gripping the  wheel and my knuckles are white. Relax, Sally, you can do this.
 
The bridge over the lake is icy. What is that idiot doing? He’s going too fast. I’m in the middle of the bridge. I can’t scoot over. No, oh God help me.
 
Paper reads: Trucker and young woman join fatality toll.

About shirleymclain930

I am a retired RN, I am currently promoting book, Dobyns Chronicles. My first one published in November 2010, called "The Tower", which has been revised. I'm enjoying my retirement to the fullest. I like the graphic adventure and travel and make friends. I have 5 dogs and 3 cats. They are like having a house full of three years olds. They are a large part of my life and I can't imagine not having them.

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